Wednesday, September 24, 2008

Online Journalism in Action - My version

So we've followed the breaking news story of a couple found dead in their New Smyrna, Fla. home on Monday morning, and we've looked into how the Sentinel has followed the story (and updated it with new findings in the case).

Now, let's take a look at how the article might look in the next day's paper. Keep in mind, there are some differences in style when it comes to writing for the web and writing for print. You'll notice them when you follow a breaking news story online during the day and then look at the print version in the next morning's paper.

So, if I were the writer assigned to the tragic story out of New Smyrna, here's how I would write the first few paragraphs of the story for the next day's paper (after reading it, go back and look at the final web version of the story and note the differences in my version and the online story):

Investigation of deceased New Smyrna couple continues

Andrew Donovan
Wednesday, September 24, 2008

NEW SMYRNA - Investigators are still searching for clues into what happened to a couple that was found dead Monday in their New Smyrna Beach home.

Police discovered Steven G. Brady and his wife, Pamela Palmer Brady, dead at their Cedar Avenue home about 9:35 a.m. Monday after Pamela Brady failed to show up for work at Crystal Lake Elementary School in Lake Mary, where she was a second-grade teacher.

While the cause of death for Steven Brady, who retired recently after 23 years as a regional legal adviser to the Florida Department of Law Enforcement's Orlando operations center, was determined, investigators are still unsure of how Pamela Brady died.

The Volusia County Medical Examiner's Office determined that Brady, 58, died of a self-inflicted gunshot would to the head, New Smyrna Beach police Sgt. Michael Brouilette said Tuesday.

But an autopsy on the body of his wife, a 27-year teaching veteran for Seminole County Public Schools, did not determined the cause of death.

There were no obvious signs of trauma to the body, Brouillette said. Investigators are awaiting toxivology results to help determine the cause of death.

Online Journalism in Action - Analysis

We just followed a breaking news story over the past 24 hours. So, what did we learn?

Well, it doesn't take much to notice the added detail and depth of the story over time. With each update, readers were provided with new findings in the case and were left more informed on the background of the two victims.

Think back to the orginial story that was posted on the Sentinel's homepage. The story provided little, if any, detail. All it told us was that two people had been found dead in their home following a well-being check-up by police.

But, when the story was updated nearly 8 hours later, readers were provided with the names of the deceased, what they did for a living, and why police went to the house in the first place (one of the victims never showed up for work). Readers should also notice that the headline of the story, and the writer of the story, have changed as well. 

The headline change reflects the fact that new information has been released in the case and lets readers know that the story has been updated. 

The author change is something different. As is common with many crime-related articles at newspapers, story ideas develop from the police scanner. I'm willing to bet that someone in the newsroom initially found out about the dead couple from the police scanner and wrote a quick brief (for the web) from that information. After that, it is likely that editors assigned the story to a specific reporter on that beat.

The story was next updated at 1:38 p.m. the next day (almost 15 hours after the last update). While it took quite some time to learn the latest, the new story gave readers more background on the victims and shed a bit more light on the circumstances of the situation. Again, the headline changed to reflect the update (and another writer was added to the story).

The next update came just one hour later and provided even more detail on the case. Readers were now provided with the cause of death for the husband was revealed (self-inflicted gunshot wound). The wife's cause of death, according to the article, was still unknown (and would likely be included in a later follow-up on the case). The headline has once again changed.

While they may go right over the head of some readers at the time, it is pretty interesting to go back and look at a series of updates to a breaking news story and take note of the changes and additions included. If you didn't notice the changes when following the story the first time, I urge you to go back and take another look. I'm sure you'll even notice some that I didn't.

Tuesday, September 23, 2008

Online Journalism in Action (Part 4)

Here is the latest update of the breaking news story (note how more and more details are being released by authorities and subsequently being incorporated into the story):

Former FDLE adviser died from self-inflicted gunshot, cops say

Susan Jacobson and Gary Taylor - Sentinel Staff Writers
2:38 PM EDT, September 23, 2008


The Volusia County Medical Examiner's Office determined that former Florida Department of Law Enforcement legal advisor Steven G. Brady died of a self-inflicted gunshot wound to the head, New Smyrna Beach police Sgt. Michael Brouillette said this afternoon.

But an autopsy on the body of his wife, Pamela Palmer Brady, did not determine the cause of death, Brouillette said.

There were no obvious signs of trauma to the body. Investigators are awaiting toxicology results to help determine the cause of death.

Brady and his wife, a Seminole County elementary-school teacher, were found dead Monday in their New Smyrna Beach home, police said.

Brady, 58, retired recently after 23 years as regional legal adviser to the FDLE's Orlando operations center. Pamela Palmer Brady, 56, was a 27-year teaching veteran for Seminole County Public Schools. She helped open the new Crystal Lake Elementary School three years ago.

Police went to the couple's home on Cedar Avenue about 9:35 a.m. after Pamela Brady failed to show up for work at Crystal Lake Elementary School in Lake Mary, where she was a second-grade teacher, Seminole County Schools Superintendent Bill Vogel said.

"We're very saddened by this tragedy," Vogel said.

Grief counselors will be on hand at the elementary school, a Seminole County Schools spokeswoman said. Staff "are very involved, at the school site, with taking care of the needs of the children and staff, and getting the school back to everyday routines and the business of education," she said.

In a statement, Joyce Dawley, special agent in charge of the FDLE in Orlando, praised Brady's professional dedication.

"Steve was both well-known and widely regarded, and was a friend to many within the law enforcement profession," the statement reads. "He touched all he knew with his sense of humor. His FDLE family will miss him deeply."

Brady, a Melbourne native and a 1977 graduate of the University of Florida College of Law, FDLE spokeswoman Sharon Gogerty said.

He was placed on leave with pay about a month ago, she said, but she would not say why.

A Port Orange man sought an injunction for protection against Brady last month, claiming he was physically attacked and had his life threatened after catching the man and his wife in a sexual relationship.

Douglas C. Canter filed paperwork Aug. 15 requesting the injunction against Brady, but a week later filed a notice of voluntary dismissal of the action.

The FDLE placed Brady on paid leave Aug. 15 and he retired Sept. 15. The state agency would not release details about the paid leave because it is part of an open internal investigation.

In the paperwork Canter filed seeking the injunction, he said that he had contacted Brady's boss.

Canter said that after he walked in on Brady and his wife, Brady placed him in a choke hole until he lost consciousness.

Canter said Brady said, at least five times: "I am going to kill you."

Brady "is a law enforcement officer and carries multiple firearms and is fully capable of carrying out [the] threat," Canter wrote.

Canter also said that Brady tried to run him over while he was standing in his driveway, "striking me with his vehicle and knocking me to the ground."

Brady, a former Seminole County prosecutor and Orange County public defender, also was a published author. Murder Revisited: A True Story of Deadly Deception was published about a dozen years ago, co-written with a true-crime writer and based on a case Brady worked on with FDLE agents in Tampa.

Susan Jacobson can be reached at sjacobson@orlandosentinel.com or 407-540-5981. Gary Taylor can be reached at gtaylor@orlandosentinel.com or 386-851-7910.

Online Journalism in Action (Part 3)

Here is the third update of the story:

Former FDLE adviser, wife found dead in New Smyrna home

Susan Jacobson and Gary Taylor - Sentinel Staff Writers
1:38 PM EDT, September 23, 2008


A longtime legal adviser to the Florida Department of Law Enforcement and his wife, a Seminole County elementary-school teacher, were found dead Monday in their New Smyrna Beach home, police said.

Investigators would not reveal how Steven G. Brady, 58, who retired recently after 23 years as regional legal adviser to the FDLE's Orlando operations center, and Pamela Palmer Brady, 56, died.

Police were awaiting results of autopsies being performed today before releasing information on the cause of death.

Police went to the couple's home on Cedar Avenue about 9:35 a.m. after Pamela Brady failed to show up for work at Crystal Lake Elementary School in Lake Mary, where she was a second-grade teacher, Seminole County Schools Superintendent Bill Vogel said.

"We're very saddened by this tragedy," Vogel said.

Grief counselors will be on hand at the elementary school, a Seminole County Schools spokeswoman said. Staff "are very involved, at the school site, with taking care of the needs of the children and staff, and getting the school back to everyday routines and the business of education," she said.

In a statement, Joyce Dawley, special agent in charge of the FDLE in Orlando, praised Brady's professional dedication.

"Steve was both well-known and widely regarded, and was a friend to many within the law enforcement profession," the statement reads. "He touched all he knew with his sense of humor. His FDLE family will miss him deeply."

Brady, a Melbourne native and a 1977 graduate of the University of Florida College of Law, FDLE spokeswoman Sharon Gogerty said.

He was placed on leave with pay about a month ago, she said, but she would not say why.

A Port Orange man sought an injunction for protection against Brady last month, claiming he was physically attacked and had his life threatened after catching the man and his wife in a sexual relationship.

Douglas C. Canter filed paperwork Aug. 15 requesting the injunction against Brady, but a week later filed a notice of voluntary dismissal of the action.

The FDLE placed Brady on paid leave Aug. 15 and he retired Sept. 15. The state agency would not release details about the paid leave because it is part of an open internal investigation.

In the paperwork Canter filed seeking the injunction, he said that he had contacted Brady's boss.

Canter said Brady said, at least five times: "I am going to kill you."Brady "is a law enforcement officer and carries multiple firearms and is fully capable of carrying out [the] threat," Canter wrote.

Canter also said that Brady tried to run him over while he was standing in his driveway, "striking me with his vehicle and knocking me to the ground."

Brady, a former Seminole County prosecutor and Orange County public defender, also was a published author. Murder Revisited: A True Story of Deadly Deception was published about a dozen years ago, co-written with a true-crime writer and based on a case Brady worked on with FDLE agents in Tampa.

Susan Jacobson can be reached at sjacobson@orlandosentinel.com or 407-540-5981. Gary Taylor can be reached at gtaylor@orlandosentinel.com or 386-851-7910.

Monday, September 22, 2008

Online Journalism in Action (Part 2)

Here is an updated version of the breaking news story out of New Smyrna:

Lake Mary teacher one of two found dead in New Smyrna home

Susan Jacobson - Sentinel Staff Writer
10:25 PM EDT, September 22, 2008


A longtime legal adviser to the Florida Department of Law Enforcement and his wife, a teacher at a Seminole County elementary school, were found dead Monday in their New Smyrna Beach home, police said.

Investigators would not reveal how Steven G. Brady, 58, who retired recently after 23 years as regional legal adviser to the FDLE's Orlando operations center, and Pamela Palmer Brady died.

Police went to the couple's home on Cedar Avenue about 9:35 a.m. after Pamela Brady, 56, failed to show up for work at Crystal Lake Elementary School in Lake Mary, where she was a second-grade teacher, Seminole County Schools Superintendent Bill Vogel said.

"We're very saddened by this tragedy," Vogel said.

Joyce Dawley, special agent in charge of the FDLE in Orlando, in a prepared statement praised Brady's professional dedication.

"Steve was both well-known and widely regarded, and was a friend to many within the law enforcement profession," the statement reads. "He touched all he knew with his sense of humor. His FDLE family will miss him deeply."

Brady, a Melbourne native and a 1977 graduate of the University of Florida College of Law, had retired in the past couple of weeks, FDLE spokeswoman Sharon Gogerty said. He was placed on leave with pay about a month ago, she said, but she would not say why.

Brady, a former Seminole County prosecutor and Orange County public defender, also was a published author. Murder Revisited: A True Story of Deadly Deception, was published about a dozen years ago, co-written with a true-crime writer and based on a case Brady worked on with FDLE agents in Tampa.

Susan Jacobson can be reached at sjacobson@orlandosentinel.com or 407-540-5981.

Online Journalism in Action (Part 1)

To this point, most of my discussion regarding online journalism has focused on the added responsibilities assigned to reporters and editors. I've discussed my own experiences with online journalism and how it has changed my role as a freelance reporter for The Miami Herald and also as a sports intern for The Observer-Dispatch.

However, today, I'm going to focus on yet another aspect of the craft - the immediacy of online journalism. I touched upon this element - albeit briefly - when I wrote about my work with the Herald (specifically my being required to call in game scores after each quarter). But, now we're going to take a firsthand look at online journalism and its unique offering of immediacy by following a breaking news story from The Orlando Sentinel website.

The purpose of this is to take note of changes (specifically additions) made to the story over time (note the time stamps), and to realize the ability of online journalism to offer immediate updates on breaking news stories (something that cannot be accomplished with print media).

So, without further ado, here's the first version of the story (check back to the blog for updated versions):

Two found dead in New Smyrna home

Bianca Prieto Sentinel - Staff Writer
2:55 PM EDT, September 22, 2008


New Smyrna police are investigating the deaths of two people found in a home this morning.

The bodies of a man and woman were found by an officer doing a well-being check around 9:35 a.m. today.

The names of the victims have not been released.

Police did not say how the two died.

Check back for more information.