Now, let's take a look at how the article might look in the next day's paper. Keep in mind, there are some differences in style when it comes to writing for the web and writing for print. You'll notice them when you follow a breaking news story online during the day and then look at the print version in the next morning's paper.
So, if I were the writer assigned to the tragic story out of New Smyrna, here's how I would write the first few paragraphs of the story for the next day's paper (after reading it, go back and look at the final web version of the story and note the differences in my version and the online story):
Investigation of deceased New Smyrna couple continues
Andrew Donovan
Wednesday, September 24, 2008
NEW SMYRNA - Investigators are still searching for clues into what happened to a couple that was found dead Monday in their New Smyrna Beach home.
Police discovered Steven G. Brady and his wife, Pamela Palmer Brady, dead at their Cedar Avenue home about 9:35 a.m. Monday after Pamela Brady failed to show up for work at Crystal Lake Elementary School in Lake Mary, where she was a second-grade teacher.
While the cause of death for Steven Brady, who retired recently after 23 years as a regional legal adviser to the Florida Department of Law Enforcement's Orlando operations center, was determined, investigators are still unsure of how Pamela Brady died.
The Volusia County Medical Examiner's Office determined that Brady, 58, died of a self-inflicted gunshot would to the head, New Smyrna Beach police Sgt. Michael Brouilette said Tuesday.
But an autopsy on the body of his wife, a 27-year teaching veteran for Seminole County Public Schools, did not determined the cause of death.
There were no obvious signs of trauma to the body, Brouillette said. Investigators are awaiting toxivology results to help determine the cause of death.
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